Re: RJ160355 Amore Magic Academy
Just reporting for the sake of reporting, but there's a sentence that looks like it's missing a word in the opening, when the teacher is explaining magic to the whole class:
"Though we were able to rescue them, she the members of her party all became [...]"
It's a small thing, and it looks like there are no other problems with the translation so far (though I'm pretty early into the game). I'll keep an open for any other small typos and stuff and report them
Good job on finishing yet another translation m1zuki!
edit: a while later, the teacher says "you'll be working in pairs of 6 [...]".
Either it's a small mistake, or my english is not as fluent as I thought. (I get the meaning behind it, but it sounds weird)
If it's the latter, a lot of guys I grew with would be delighted to know you can actually form pairs of 6, and the teacher was wrong not to let them do it.
Also, in the description of the equipment you can buy in the start, most of the magic orbs say "the effect is low", while a couple say "Effect is stronger than 1". Is there something special about these or is it just a small slip up? The ones in question are the "Magic orb-Acc1" and "Magic orb-Genbu1"
edit2: This one I'm not actually sure, because the theory stuff I know is from portuguese and I was never really that great at it, but, in the sex scene a while later between Akira and Remina, I feel like commas would be warranted: "Above all, being able to become one with Remina, who I always loved, filled me with a sense of acomplishment and joy"
(I remember it's some theory stuff about it being a subordinate clause that explains something about the subject instead of restricting ... somethin like "the girl, who wears glasses, is the one I like" vs "the girl who wears glasses is the one I like")
another missing word a while later, "Wait, but then the deepest parts of my vagina can be completely right now.....!?"
(at this point I just opened up my VX Ace editor because I'm too lazy to write the sentences)
edit3: In common event 88, var108==3, there's a word missing. "Well, whatever. If it makes \N[1] then we can walk home that way." (happy)