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Hmm. *reserves comments about OCs in fanfics until more about Nylenn is shown* I will say it's at least an OC that makes *sense* as opposed to one thrown in there for borderline Mary-Sue purposes.

Nice work on the "deathblow" description with the ogre, even if poor Thorval ended up under the thing. And you're right. What's worse than an ogre? An ogre ON FIRE. At least the flames went out before it landed on top of him hehehe.
 
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I tried to balance Nylenn's power out with the fact that he needs a lot of preparation time for it.

Before anybody asks, Thorval's spec is called Brigand, and Nylenn's spec is called Dervish. I may present a full skill tree and description for both of them later on, but I haven't put that much thought into the details of them yet.
 

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Oh, he doesn't seem horribly OP. I was more saying how you introducing that makes more sense than the one DA fanfic I'm reading that worked in the...what'safuck orbs from LotR that lets you communicate over distances. I like the story for the most part, but she occasionally throws in some things that just break the story for me. Modified skill sets don't.
 
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I was actually thinking about detaching the original crew from the group of OCs and adding a few more, but now I'm not so sure about that anymore. Also I'm planning on writing a full side-quest type chapter. I need some time to consider this.
 

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Just remember that side quests are where you get the most XP! - Red mage

And see where the story takes you. Might be interesting.
 
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I finally have an idea where to take this story, and this side quest is turning out to be part of the main quest, so to speak. I've decided to divide this chapter into two parts, the first of which can be found below.

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DISCLAIMER: This is a Dragon Age: Origins fanfiction, set several months after the end of the main game. Spoilers are present. The expansion pack Awakening is not included here. I have not played DA:O in English and as such, some terms may be translated wrong.
I don't own DA:O and I'm not looking to make a profit out of it.

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The secrets of Whitestone, Part 1: War Machines

“These cold, quiet walls remind me of home,” Nylenn remarks in an absent-minded voice. Zevran, to my left, raises an eyebrows and smirks. “Funny, the stench reminds me of mine.” Oghren twitches as something creaks in the distance. “This whole building creeps me the fuck out,” he grumbles into his beard and takes a swig from the wineskin. I fully agree with him as I get to work on the lock. Everybody is keeping an eye out.

Sharyn has given me the command over them as a kind of ordeal – and it turns out to be one in more than one sense. We have heard whispers about this place in the surrounding villages. Again and again people disappear... peasants, nobles, even Templars sent to investigate. None of them were ever seen again. So the four of us made our way to Whitestone. It used to be a hospital for the insane, but it was abandoned for some reason or another – the people weren't sure about it. And as soon as I laid my eyes on its dirty white walls I wanted to get the hell away. For some reason it looks more like a big chantry than a hospital – it might be the cemetery before its gates, who knows. Or the big entrance gate. Locked. It wasn't for much longer. And here we are now, in a stinking, cold, quiet hall. The only light comes from the still open front door, and the floor it shines on is dirtied by all manners of filth. Everything is.

Oghren belches loudly, breaking my concentration. “Why do we always get the creepy abandoned buildings? Just once I want to stumble over an abandoned brewery, or a dusty whorehouse full of desire demons.” Zevran sighs and shakes his head. “Ah yes, whores. It's been a while...” He eyes Oghren, causing the dwarf to stumbe backwards. “Hey now, don't do anything I'd regret.” Nylenn stares at them, and even though he's hard as hell to read he looks pretty bewildered. Bet he hasn't seen a whore in his life. Damn – need to focus. There we go, door is open.

A deafening screech hits my ears, and I jump to my feet. Not the darkspawn, no... Maker, what is THAT?

What charges out of the darkness is unlike anything I have ever seen. At first sight it could be one of those walking dead, but only if somebody rammed a lot of metal spikes through its flesh and nailed a solid metal plate over its eyes. The lips have been cut to bare the things rotting teeth. Its arms are cut off at the elbow and are replaced with a blade and some kind of metallic claw. “Somebody made this,” Zevran curses as he raises his weapons. Yeah, that's what I'm thinking as well. The thing is heading straight for Nylenn... only to be lifted up into the air by a hammer blow that would crush any man's ribcage. Oghren burps a warcry, and we all get our act together... just in time for more of those things running out of the darkness, together with the first one getting back up and moving forward again.

Not two of them look completely the same, I notice. Somebody has put a lot of work into transforming these things into... yes, what? War Machines? Mentally I shrug as one of these things comes straight at me. War Machine is as good a name as anything else. This one used to be dwarf, and a whole lot of metal plates are grafted to its skin. The lipless mouth seems to grin through the blonde, shaggy beard as it swings its spiked club-arms at me. I try to get in range for a good blow, but that thing is flailing like mad as it steadily pushes me backwards. There's no opening what so ever... or is there? I wait for its arms to come up and then dive forward, leading the mace with both hands to shatter the things shoulder. Something clubs me in the back and changes my path, but I still manage to break its arm for good. It screeches... not in pain, but in anger. It rages. Rage. There was something about rage in the back of my mind...

Nylenn! Rage! COLD!” Hey, good job on barking orders there. Came out all hoarse and creaky, but the elf seems to have gotten the idea. As Zev, Oghren and me hold the things at bay, Nylenn slowly starts whirling – arms raised above his head, eyes closed. The tattoos on his body and his face change into runes and symbols of winter, and the temperature seems to drop a few degrees. With a grunt Nylenn spreads his arms, and I can feel a chill running down my spine as the entire team's weapons suddenly become crusted in thick layers of ice. This is nothing like the frost weapon spells I've seen before, with that wimpy glow. Oh no, this is some serious shit.

I can't dwell too long on it, because the War Machine Dwarf is attacking again. With grim satisfaction I hear its cries of agony as the deathly cold blade cuts its flesh. So I remembered right. There's probably a rage demon somewhere in there, and these bastards HATE the cold. It swings its good arm at me, but I manage to catch it with my weapons and throw it into the air – long enough for me to spin forward and lob its head off with the dagger. The War Machine collapses, halted at last.

I can feel a heal spell patching the worst of my wounds and nod at Nylenn before helping Zevran out. He looks pretty beat up – and that's no wonder. He faces a Qunari War Machine with only one arm... but that arm has been upgraded with a maul so big that even Oghren would have to wield it with both hands. I waste no time in starting to wail at it in order to give Zev a moment to catch his breath. It works – the big undead turns around and I barely manage to dodge that hammer blow. While down there I once again go for the knee – it worked in the past. And so does it this time. The mace (I really oughtta name it someday) shatters the War Machine's leg. And as it sinks down, I shoot up and lodge my dagger in its skull.

A swift upward thrust, as Jossyrn has shown me. Through the jaw up- and forwards towards the spine. Most living things would be instantly killed by that, and this horror suffers the same fate. It falls like a sack of potatoes. Zev raises an eyebrow, obviously impressed. “That was a good shot there, Warden. Not everybody can do it.” His arrogantly curved lip tells me that he is one of the few that can. I nod at him briefly before turning, but the battle is pretty much over. Oghren is bashing his maul over and over into the skull of an already dead War Machine, and Nylenn shatters a frozen one with his staff. I look back and forth between the two for a moment before approaching Oghren. “Dead,” I say to calm him down. The berserker gives it a few more blows before coming down. “Oh, aye, I... I just wanted to make sure, is all.” His beard twitches as he points at this. “Any idea what this is?” With a grin into my mustache I shrug. “War Machine.” He furrows his eyebrows, but after a moment he gives a shrug of its own. “Aye, why not. Let's go and kill whatever made them, hm?”

I can't disagree with that.
 

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I nominate "Shin splitter" or something to the effect that he keeps breaking kneecaps with that mace of his for the name *laughs*
 
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Well, here it is. Pretty long chapter this time, and the very ending is a tad bit rushed, but I couldn't wait to get this up on the site. The new character will get his back story in a epilogue-esque chapter.

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DISCLAIMER: This is a Dragon Age: Origins fanfiction, set several months after the end of the main game. Spoilers are present. The expansion pack Awakening is not included here. I have not played DA:O in English and as such, some terms may be translated wrong.
I don't own DA:O and I'm not looking to make a profit out of it.

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The secrets of Whitestone, Part 2: The Engineer

We slowly work ourselves deeper into the hospital. The atmosphere is downright eerie – somewhere in the distance I think I can hear somebody cackling madly, and the dark air is old, stuffy and richly filled with the stench of rotten meat. Most of the rooms – former sickrooms, I guess - are empty, save for a few more War Machines. They're just standing around all over Whitestone until somebody pops into their room... and then they go fucking nuts until you bash their brains in. Now and then we stumble over bodies that haven't been transformed yet: some Templars, mercenaries and peasants. None of them can be here for more than a few days – whoever crafts the War Machines is working quickly. Nylenn's been torching the bodies... it felt wrong at first, but somehow I can't see a flaw in his logic. For one, they can't rise again, and second, they can't be used to create War Machines. Still the stench of grilled flesh is nauseating... and it makes my stomach rumble.

After a bit we come to a halt in the middle of a massive hall. The locked door and the signs all around show that this room was once used for all the extremely dangerous patients – quarantine, I think, is what Zevran called it. Whatever was in it once has been removed, leaving a barren hall. A complicated pattern of creases has been carved into the ground, which slopes slightly downwards towards a massive gate with some kind of magic lock. At least it's something I couldn't crack open in a lifetime. Before the door, a sigil or a rune of some kind is caved into the ground, and all the creases lead up to it. A sinking feeling in my gut sets in, only moments before Nylenn speaks up. “Blood,” he calmly states. “This is the Tevinter rune for blood, but it looks to have been carved recently.” His freakishly bald forehead wrinkles as he ponders. “Surely it would take all the blood of an average human to fill that rune up... Any volunteers?” He turns his head to look at me. Little freak. I twitch and take a step backwards, a hand on the hilt of my mace.

“Hey, what does this do?” “Oghren, don't- for FUCK'S sake!” Something starts rattling in the darkness above us. I can see the damn dwarf quickly stepping away from that lever he just pulled out of the corner of my eye. And then an earth-shattering roar... and terror. And disgust. What is lowered out of the darkness is nothing else but a live god-damn ogre. An ogre hanging from chains. Without arms. Or legs. Or eyes.

Zevran gags somewhere behind me, and Nylenn whispers, “By the Maker, it's alive. It's still alive!” The ogre hears him. He swings forward in his chains and growls in his direction... it's a pathetic sound, akin to the whining of a deathly injured dog. I didn't think I would ever have pity for any darkspawn – I was wrong. The recently healed scars of cuts on the ogre's body identify it as the key to the door, but I hesitate. Even for the darkspawn this is unnecessarily cruel. Whoever did this has no sympathy for them, and yet they are undoubtedly evil...

A hand on my wrist shakes me out of my thoughts. Oghren stands behind me. “You know that ogres heal fast, don't ya? Just cut 'im open, he'll make it,” he explains with a point towards the bulky, heaving form. “You're not having pity with him, do ya?” Quietly – as I tend to be – I shake my head and unsheathe my dagger. Pity, no. As I walk up to him, the ogre roars into my face. Foul stench and vile spit hits me... and with a scowl I ram my dagger into his neck. Mercy, yes. Up- and forwards, towards the spine.

His roar dies, suddenly, even as its black blood sprays forth and hits both me and the rune below. With a grunt I tear the blade downwards to widen the wound before stepping aside, out of the way of the bloodstream. I barely register the door opening or the ogre's carcass retreating into the darkness, carried off by some devious mechanism. My knuckles turn white as I grip the dagger so hard I can feel the leather wrappings nearly cutting into the skin of my hand. If it takes my sight and my hearing, I will find the evil behind this all, and may the Maker have mercy on its soul.

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“AH! You haf arrifed! Ja, just like ze Blood King has foretold!” This is... disappointing. This hunchback is supposed to be creator of all those abominations? His once colorful robe hangs in shreds and tatters off his body, and his black hair seems to actively flee from his head in strands. I turn my attention away from the misfigured man on the gallery and take in the room we ran into after opening the door. This is the center of the carnage we faced, no doubt about it. Cages everywhere, and most of them are filled with the dead or those near it. All of them, except... “You will pay for this, VILE CREATURE!” Yep, this one is still pretty alive. “Your EVIL DEEDS will not go UNPUNISHED!” Alive and loud. The cripple spins around and returns the yelling.

“SILENCE! You vill be my masterpiece! I vill find ze shtrongest demon of zem all and bind it to your corpse! I vill clad you in ze zickest arrmor and apply ze sharpest swords, and you vill lead ze armies of ze Blood King to VICKTORY! Eferybody will know ZE ENGINEER!” Wow, that lisp of his is pretty bad. But then again... “NEVER!” That other guy surely has enough pride to attract a demon, for once.
“AHEM!” Oghren finally decides that we are kinda getting overshadowed here and speaks up. “So are we just gonna bash your head in now or-” “You vill DIE NOW, Warrden scum!” “Of course,” the dwarf sighs and hefts his maul. With a triumphant cackle ze – I'm sorry – THE Engineer raises his hands before slamming them the hell down on something in front of him – presumably a button of some sorts.

I don't know HOW he managed to build all this (magic, I assume), but the entire wall underneath his balcony retreats to present a gaping chasm. At the same time, magic barriers activate to block the stairway up to the balcony The Engineer resides on. Something can be heard screeching... I notice Oghren and Zevran paling noticably and readying their weapons. I'm quick to follow their example.

Then, a motherfucking Dragon War Machine shoots out of the funnel below.

I have seen The Archdemon once, during its attack on Denerim. Luckily this beast here is not nearly its size... Still, as it (she, I assume) spreads its wings it spans almost the entire room. Zevran fires a quick arrow, but it shatters on the primitive, yet effective armor it wears. Fuck me, we're going to die.

The beast lands. The battle begins.

Nylenn barely has time to fire an Arcane Bolt before a swipe of the beast's tail takes his leg out from underneath him. The projectile barely fazes her. I've seen it burning a War Machine's face off- She faces me. Crap. With a sudden pounce she catapults herself into my direction, and only a quick roll forward saves me from being mauled. I end up underneath her and use the moment to try and break her leg, but the mace does little to no damage. Crap! Suddenly she stomps a rear leg on me, nearly crushing my ribcage, and slides me out from below her with a backwards kick. By the time I'm back up she has headbutted Zevran just as he was about to put a dagger into her eye. She rears up over his prone form and sends a blast of flames down onto him... but they're not quite reaching him. I can see Nylenn from the corner of my eyes, lowering his arms after casting the Force Field.

Oghren attacks, and that crazy god damn dwarf does nothing less than jumping at the beast, the hammer raised high above his head. The War Machine turns her head – and gets a maul right between the eyes. Score one for us. She tumbles backwards and shakes off the effects of that mighty blow, and I use my chance to get in range and deliver a low blow against one of her shins. She roars, and I believe she is limping, but still there's enough power in that leg to kick me into the air and against a wall. Somewhere, I hear The Engineer laughing. Son of a bitch. I think at this point I've gone unconscious for a moment, because the next thing I remember is Nylenn's face above me, and cries of battle behind me.

“Thorval! Are you alright?” I wave the elf off and get back up, even though my back hurts like hell. The dragon is currently trampling all over Oghren, and I run up to her to distract her before he's turned into pulp. With a grunt I bash her over the head with the mace, and she turns her attention towards me. Suddenly, Zevran is there – the Force Field must have lost its power. His dagger plunges downward, tearing into the rotting skin of the War Machine's wing. As she screeches, he throws himself backwards, tearing a big hole into the wing. With an angry hiss she turns her neck around and snaps at him, and only the elf's quick reflexes prevent him from losing an arm. With a curse in his funny accent he rams the dagger forward again and manages to lodge it straight into her nostril. Predictably, she is pissed off. She rears up, dagger still in her face and Zevran still on the dagger. She looks like she's about to fry him alive – and Maker, I do kinda like him. So I take a few steps back and burst into a run, launching myself at the dragon.

Once more this feeling arises – like moving through syrup. Everything slows down, and I can recognize every scale on her belly, every wrinkle in Zev's armor, every lice in Oghren's beard. And then the dagger strikes true, and I hear her undead roars of agony as I slowly slide downwards on her flailing body, opening up her torso. I hold back my disgust as her rotten organs spill forth... and then she starts to fall over backwards. Luckily – I didn't want to get crushed again. As she hits the ground Zevran rolls away from her thrashing head... which suddenly rears up and shoots towards me. Out of the corner of my eye, however, a maul arrives – and this time her skull caves in, battered and bruised as it already was.
Oghren stands right next to me, breathing heavily before belching. Of course. “MINE! MY KILL! I call it, I killed her!” He looks around, his maul slowly pointing at each of us – as if anybody would dare to challenge him over this kill.

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“No! NO! Zis is all rong – how... DAMN YOU!” The Engineer frantically hammers around on a plate full of runes, trying to release some other ungodly horror onto us. Instead a hum ceases – which I didn't realize was there until it's gone – and the hunchback spins around, a look of horror on his face. “Vat? NO! I didn't – I wasn't...” “Fiend! Grave robber! ABOMINATION!” Oh, that guy. We can't really see him from our position. What we can see is The Engineer getting lifted of his feet and high into the air, held up by a pair of muscled arms. “No, please! I beg you, let-” The arms drop him suddenly, out of our view, and a gruesome crunch is heard. The magic barriers drop, and we make haste up the stairs.

Unsurprisingly, we find The Engineer dead, his already crippled back now broken to boot. Over him towers one of the biggest humans I have ever seen in my life. This guy is as tall as a Qunari, I kid you not. There are streaks of silver both at his temples and in his thick beard, but the rest of his hair is black as the night. In a similar manner, while his face shows some wrinkles, his body is still very much in top condition – easily visible, because he does not wear more than a ragged pair of short pants. A scar parts his face from the jaw well into the hairline, looking very much like somebody tried to kill the man with an axe to the skull and failed, even though he hit him.

Never have I wanted a man more... to fight on my side.
 
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"No Oghren!" xD this is a really good work rule keep up the good writing. Although... I would prefer if you introduced some pairings...
 
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A love interest is planned. Otherwise the team would turn into a total sausagefest.
 

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The ending didn't seem all that rushed. Battle scenes are always the hardest for me to write and it does seem like there's a lot going on in them. Unless you mean the ending ending with the new guy. About the only thing that makes me wonder is how he got loose.

A love interest is planned. Otherwise the team would turn into a total sausagefest.
*coughawakeningscough* Not that I'm complaining, since, y'know, I'm a girl, but still...

On to the helping(?) bits. (spoiled, since I'm getting long with them.)

"For once, they can't rise again, and second, they can't be used to create War Machines." - For one, or perhaps "first" since you use "second" as well.

Capitalize "tevinter."

“Hey, what does this do?” “Oghren, don't- for FUCK'S sake!” - *giggles madly*

"Whoever did this has no sympathy for them, and yet they are undoubtedly evil..." Also "By" should be capitalized in "By the Maker."

Gamestuffs: That ogre may yet still be alive. If I recall the codex entry, they need burned to be completely killed. Also, yes, female dragons are generally the only ones that have wings.

"Never have I wanted a man more... to fight on my side. " - *giggles madly again*
 
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The ending didn't seem all that rushed. Battle scenes are always the hardest for me to write and it does seem like there's a lot going on in them. Unless you mean the ending ending with the new guy. About the only thing that makes me wonder is how he got loose.
The Engineer was pressing all kinds of buttons on his control board, and one of them was for the cage that the man was held in.
 

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Figured as much. Bit of a whoopsie on his part, wasn't it? *laughs*
 

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*applause* Rule I'd forgotten how much i much I enjoy your writing style.

So far the only thing that disappoints me is the length. Keep going :p
 
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Updated at last. As promised, here's the epilogue. Fairly short, but I had to get it out of the way to be able to get on with the story. Next update should not take me as long. I hope.

The secrets of Whitestone, Part 3: Epilogue

“My name is Ser Alexander Osric,” the man says, “and might I inquire for a pair of pants before we leave?” Might I inquire? What, was he hit in the head or something? Oh wait... yeah, he totally was. And he's got a scar to prove it. I'm about to shake my head, both about myself and to answer his question, but Oghren jumps in. “Actually yeah. I looted them off one of the bodies before Ser Burns-a-lot over there,” he unnecessarily points his flabby chin at Nylenn, whose face takes on an indignant look, “got his bonfiring on.” The dwarf drops his backpack and pulls out a set of hefty-looking silverite chain mail, complete with boots and gloves. No idea how he managed to drag that around, but who am I to judge?

Ser Alexander regards the heavy chain mail for a moment before putting it on with a seasoned warrior's practice. “I appreciate the effort, Ser Dwarf. Now that I'm armored, ONWARD TO...” He actually strikes a pose and points into the distance. The four of us exchange looks. Great. An outright nut case. Just what we need in this world-saving freak show. Ser Alex caught himself though and turns his head to look at us. “I – I appear to have neglected to ask just what you lot are up to.” You also forgot to ask who we are and why we're here, smart ass. With an inward sigh – the initial exaltation already faded – I motion towards Nylenn and me. “Grey Wardens,” I rasp and barely even feel insulted as he jumps at the sound of my voice. “Allies,” I continue as I point towards Zevran and Oghren. The elf smiles and bows in gentle perfection. “Indeed. We heard whispers of the horrors plaguing this region and ventured here to set things right.” Hmph. Quick tongue, that one. Ser Alex sure seems to appreciate it, though. “Very well then, good Ser Elf,” he says and slaps his hand on Zevran's shoulder in a hail-fellow-well-met kind of way. “Take me to your leader.”

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An interesting array runs over Sharyn's face as we approach the camp with Ser Alex in tow. Disbelief. Hope. Realization. Disappointment. Hm. Maybe there's a story behind that. She catches herself quick, though. With a smile she shakes her head. “Only a Grey Warden can investigate an abandoned hospital and come back with a mighty warrior. Well met, Ser,” she exclaims, raising her hand in greeting. “I take Thorval has explained why we're here?” Ser Alex shoots me a quick look out of dark blue eyes, and his mouth twitches under his black-and-silver full beard. “Umm, no. Ser Thorval has barely spoken a word.” No shit. “However, Ser Zevran was kind enough to elaborate on your situation.” I watch Sharyn as Ser Alex talks, but she doesn't react. Right, she grew up as a noble. She's probably used to big-talking weirdos.

They are about to introduce each other when a commotion just on the edge of the camp catches everybody's attention. Ichabold, the Mabari, is barking up a storm, and a terrified voice cries for help. I am nearest, and as such it's me that catches the collapsing Dalish that Ichabold has found. He looks up at me with relief in his dark eyes. “T-thank the creators I... found you.” He reaches up for... something. Maybe he wants to touch my shoulder or something, but his arm only makes it halfway before falling down. Only now I realize that he's badly wounded... and the wounds are stinking. He has already started to rot from infection. Maker's Breath, how did he make it this far?

“The... the walking dead,” he groans, interrupted by a dry cough. “They are... overrunning the Brecilian Forest. An army of them, clad in... blood red garb...” The hair at the base of my neck tingles, and my eyes shoot up to meet Nylenn's. He nods. I haven't misheard. The Engineer babbled something about a Blood King, didn't he?

A groan escapes the elf's throat, and his head falls back. It takes no mage to figure out he's dead. Rest well. You fulfilled your mission. With a look of grim determination I lay him down and stand to face Sharyn.

“We go,” I say. “Now.”
 
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:'D

Yay! I'm really glad to see an update here. I've really missed your writing. Well done, again!
 

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Oh, this one's got paladin written all over him *laughs* But not exactly in that Lawful Goody goody way. Just...demeanor. This should be fun! And look forward to seeing more about the Blood King, too.
 

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Oh, this one's got paladin written all over him *laughs* But not exactly in that Lawful Goody goody way. Just...demeanor. This should be fun! And look forward to seeing more about the Blood King, too.
Oh man. Paladins make me want to kick kittens. D<
 
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Re: Dragon Age - A man of few words (Part 6 uploaded)

Haters gonna hate. Here's the next part of the story anyway. Plenty of fighting, and the introduction of the love interest.

The remnant

I really wish I had more time to admire that ass. The way the bloodstained leather skirt clings to it, the way it peeks out underneath its hem when she bends to deliver a killing blow. Oh, I just want to grab that perfect, round, full ass and make love to it. Sweet, sweet love.

Unfortunately, the woman attached to said ass is about to be beheaded by a skeleton, and that would really be a waste, now wouldn't it? So I have no other choice but to jump in and break that asshole's arm with the mace. Its unnatural screech (seriously, where the hell are they making their sounds?) attracts the attention of Ser Ass. The elven beauty spins around and swings her strangely curved sword, forcing me to jump back with a silent curse. She stares at me for a moment out of amber eyes before stating the rather obvious. “You're not dead.” “Neither are you.” Damn that voice of mine. I can see her cringe. I guess I can kiss that ass goodbye. No. Not even that.

Her eyes widen. At the same time I notice a walking dead running up to her. In the same moment that she lunges forward, I dive through under her. I have no time to turn my head, but I hear the sound of bones clattering. An instant later the kneecap of the walking dead is broken by the mace. With a growl it goes down, and I finish it with a few hard kicks against its skull. At the moment there's nothing directly near me, so I take a moment to check the situation on the clearing, this battlefield in the middle of the Brecilian forest.

Oghren is hewing through the undead rows with a perpetual scowl on his face, Zevran watching his back. Sharyn is holding off a bunch of skeletons with her greatsword while Wynne casts her healing spells. Hm, Nylenn's in trouble there. But before I can react, something big and silvery moves past me in his direction, loudly screaming “FOR THE GLORY OF THE GREY WARDENS!” That would be Ser Alexander. The giant has equipped himself with an axe and a hefty round shield that he uses to bash in a walking dead's skull.

Oh. That... that's pretty bad. If I recall the stories correctly, that thing that just waded into combat is nothing else but a Revenant. The eyes burning inside the finely crafted helmet, that feeling of dread and that sword... Maker's Breath, look at the size of that thing! I couldn't even lift that thing with two hands!

Ser Ass grabs my shoulder to shake me out of my terror. “What's the matter, Shemlen? Scared because his blade is bigger than yours?” She smiles. She actually smiles as she turns and charges this... this manifestation of death. I don't know if I want to strangle her or to propose to her. At last, I settle on looking at her butt some more while I run behind her. Everything inside me screams to get away from that thing. Let somebody else do it! Well, there's nobody else. They're all busy fighting elsewhere. Out of the corner of my eye I can see Leliana going down, and Sharyn calling out her name as she dashes towards her before the undead start to rend her flesh off her bones. Wynne's working on some spell – possibly to revive her – with the dog at her side now.

Shit, alright. There I am, right behind the revenant, and I have no clue what the hell to do. Kneecaps are out, he's too well armored. The brain stab is out as well, same reason. What the fuck am I supposed to do, poke him until he gives up? Ser Ass doesn't have these problems. With a shrill war cry on her lips she starts going wild onto the revenant with both of her swords, unleashing a flurry of strikes. Barely any of them hit, though. The revenant blocks the majority of them with his shield. Those that do hit him don't really seem to phase him.

And then he strikes.

I barely have time to even prepare for impact. After striking viciously at Ser Ass and almost cutting off her leg, the weapon comes swinging back at me full force. It takes a hastily risen dagger to keep him from beheading me. Still the blow knocks me to the floor, and my entire side hurts from the unnatural force of the blow. Maker's Breath... Maker's Breath, there's a gap in his armor. I would've never seen it from any other angle with all the decoration, but there's the clasp. Right the fuck there, like a “Hit Here” sign.

The revenant has long since forgotten about me, bearing down on Ser Ass and giving her a few more cuts along her arms and the exposed belly. This is the perfect moment. No more hesitation. I get up, dodge a stray sword swing and smash the blasted thing with my mace. Yes! It split open! Just enough to-

Shield to the face. Fuck. Fuck this sodding hurts. Damnit. I think he broke my nose. Shit, that's what you get for letting your sodding guard down. Okay, gotta pull this straight real quick....

AAHHHFUCK this hurts!

Okay, so that's that. Still bleeding all over my face, but I should be fine. Ser Ass, though, is having serious trouble fighting the revenant off. She lost one of her swords... oh hey, it's right there next to me. Just what I need. The handle still has some warmth from her hand. I grasp it tightly as I get up fully and quickly close the distance. Without pause I raise the sword and stab forward. The blade scrapes over his armor, and I have a moment of pants-shitting fear before it slides right into the gap. The revenant grunts in surprise. His ribs pose some resistance. With a grunt I push some more, and they give. The blade sinks deep into his body. He tries to spin around, but that only serves to open his body up further. With an anguished gargle he falls on his knees, the sword dropping next to him.

Ser Ass wastes no time. In a swift move I couldn't have done better myself she jumps forward, rolls on her feet and suddenly has the revenant's heavy blade in her hand. With an audible grunt of effort she raises it over her head – and rams it into his prone body with enough force to make it burst out of his front, nailing him to the ground in his kneeling position.
Still the demon within does not give up. Angrily it claws at the blade poking out of its chest. And so, with a furious hiss, Ser Ass pulls her sword from the revenant's torso and, in the same motion, spins around and lops off the sod's head.

She turns around to me. And grins. “Still not dead, I see,” she states, extending her hand. “Neither are you,” I reply with my raspy voice as I grab it.

~~~

“VICTORY,” Ser Alexander bellows as he raises his axe into the air. “GLORIOUS VICTORY!” Oghren cringes and grabs his own head. Poor sod probably has a hangover. Having Ser Alex beating on his shoulder like on a sodding cutlet doesn't help either. With a grunt and a shrug the dwarf frees himself and stumbles behind a tree. Shortly after, heaving noises can be heard. Somebody should get more booze into him quick – with the amounts of alcohol that Oghren consumes, coming down could be fatal. We traveled without pause and certainly didn't have time to pick up any booze. Even his wineskin is empty. I don't think he has been sober ever since I first met him.

Movement besides me. Sharyn comes by, supporting a healed, albeit weakened Leliana. She pauses for a moment and gives me an impressed nod. Been getting these a lot after the battle. Apparently taking down a revenant with only one other warrior is some kind of big deal. Speaking of, there's Ser Ass- no, Laritha, Laritha Mahariel, or so she told us – appearing out of one of our tents. Took her some talking to, but eventually she agreed to switch her skimpy leather armor for some scale mail. Interesting material, too. Don't know where Sharyn got that one. Looks almost like... wood? I wonder how it feels to be the last remnant of an entire clan of elves.

Oh shit, she caught me staring at her. Is she angry? Nah, doesn't seem that way. Her untattoed face (she hasn't been with the clan for long, she said) splits into a grin as she saunters over to me. Am I... blushing? Son of a bitch, I am. I'm blushing like a lay sister. Maker's Breath, here we go. Alright, clean your throat, she may want to talk a bit. AGH, that sounded like ripping leather!

“There you are, Shem. I've been meaning to talk to you for a bit.” Okay, keep a level head. “Sorry for your clan.” AGH, no! You hobnailed fool! A shadow wanders over her face, but she suppresses it. “It's... I barely got to know them, anyway.” Huh. Somebody with a positive outlook who's not a raging maniac. That's a new one. “Besides, Sharyn invited me along, and you can bet your sweet hiney that I'm craving some payback.” Well, this certainly sounds – wait, what was that about my butt? She smiles as she catches my surprise. “I'll be looking forward to fighting at your side, Shem.” She turns, and I swear to the Maker she sways her rear for me as she walks off.

This time, I do have the time to admire it.
 

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Re: Dragon Age - A man of few words (Part 7 uploaded)

So Thorval's an ass man, huh? Good to know. And bloody hate revenants. Ugh. Laritha's saucy. I like. Importing of your own character in that instance or just using the name?

Also, typo I missed commenting on in the previous chapter:

They went to "investigate" the hospital, not "invest" one.
 
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